I'm only leaving feedback because I love it so much and I wanna see what more you're capable of form here forward.
My main criticism that I noticed early on, is that the first couple minutes or so felt like they were going no where, and the premise for the rest of the short was only introduced about 2 minutes in.
Music was fenominal, my only gripe as far as ears go, is that the sound design was lacking, if any at all. Felt more music oriented than anything, which may have been intentional; if so, you're doing great there; if not, sound effects for some of the things happening on screen would further push what exactly is going on, sound design is one of the most important aspects of a film. The sounds at which materials interacting makes gives a lot of subconscious cues as to what those materials are, and give us a lot of information in terms of whats happening even. Sound design is like a story told beyond visuals and if often overlooked.
The animation was amazing. I felt as if at some points it was a collab however. The sudden changes in style made me feel like multiple people animated it, and I tried looking to see who all animated on it, but it was just you. All was great, sudden shifts in style however didn't quite feel right.
Take what I have as a grain of salt, or take it to heart. Either way, I needed to say this, because I myself needed to hear it. I know how important criticism is, and wish people would give it to me more. So just doing my part.
Cant wait to see what's next.
Very valuable feedback, thank you so so much!
Damn, this looked like it mighta been a pain in the ass to make! Clever clever. Well done
Thank you! And yes, it was super annoying wrestling with the uncooperative dough, I didn't choose the best recipe for it :P
man this is fucking terrible
Incredible commentary on what I took away as potential technological Singularity. Well done David. If I were a woman i would kiss you on the mouth.
have my children
I'd like to receive your children but my rental agreement says I can't raise children in this house, they'll find out and we'll be homeless, so I can't I'm sorry.
who ate all the hamburger helper?
Job well done
Social commentary done right.
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